考研英語待批改作文：

　　Dear Manager,

　　When I read your advertisement in the newspaper,I really have passion to apply a position of Technical Director.

　　Its a giant challenge to put my technical knowledge into practice.

　　There have two reasons for this application as follow.First of all,I have six_year experience as an Assistant Technical Director

　　in an international company,which made me could deal with different technical problems as soon as possible.

　　Secondly,as a graduate student who finished technical program in a specialization college,I have a large number of technical certifications.

　　There have a strong ambition in my mind,pushing me want to work for your company as an Technical Director.

　　I attached my resume as below,please read.I will be appreciated if you can give me an interview.Looking forward to your reply.

　　Thank you very much!

　　Yours faithfully,

　　Li Ming.

　　考研英語作文批改點評如下：

　　Dear Manager,

　　When I read your advertisement in the newspaper, I really have passion to apply a position of(改成for，apply for) Technical Director.Its a giant challenge to put my technical knowledge into practice. There have two reasons for this application as follow. First of all, I have six_year(six-year) experience as an Assistant Technical Director in an international company, which made me could deal with different technical problems as soon as possible.Secondly, as a graduate student who finished technical program in a specialization college, I have a large number of technical certifications. There have a strong ambition in my mind, pushing me want(去掉，pushing可以表達此意)to work for your company as an(應該用a) Technical Director.I attached my resume as(去掉)below, please read. I will be appreciated if you can give me an interview. Looking forward to your reply.Thank you very much!(這一部分去掉) Yours faithfully,

　　Li Ming. 點評：6分最后一段簡潔結尾即可。中間的部分是文章的主題，第二條內容有點空。語言表達能力有待加強。

　　考研英語待批改作文：

　　Dear Manager,

　　When I read your advertisement in the newspaper,I really have passion to apply a position of Technical Director.

　　Its a giant challenge to put my technical knowledge into practice.

　　There have two reasons for this application as follow.First of all,I have six_year experience as an Assistant Technical Director

　　in an international company,which made me could deal with different technical problems as soon as possible.

　　Secondly,as a graduate student who finished technical program in a specialization college,I have a large number of technical certifications.

　　There have a strong ambition in my mind,pushing me want to work for your company as an Technical Director.

　　I attached my resume as below,please read.I will be appreciated if you can give me an interview.Looking forward to your reply.

　　Thank you very much!

　　Yours faithfully,

　　Li Ming.

　　考研英語作文批改點評如下：

　　Dear Manager,

　　When I read your advertisement in the newspaper, I really have passion to apply a position of(改成for，apply for) Technical Director.Its a giant challenge to put my technical knowledge into practice. There have two reasons for this application as follow. First of all, I have six_year(six-year) experience as an Assistant Technical Director in an international company, which made me could deal with different technical problems as soon as possible.Secondly, as a graduate student who finished technical program in a specialization college, I have a large number of technical certifications. There have a strong ambition in my mind, pushing me want(去掉，pushing可以表達此意)to work for your company as an(應該用a) Technical Director.I attached my resume as(去掉)below, please read. I will be appreciated if you can give me an interview. Looking forward to your reply.Thank you very much!(這一部分去掉) Yours faithfully,

　　Li Ming. 點評：6分最后一段簡潔結尾即可。中間的部分是文章的主題，第二條內容有點空。語言表達能力有待加強。