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　　As is indicated in the cartoon above,a big crowded of drivers stay in cars on the road,waiting for their turn to go,with patience almost running up.In fact ,nowadays,this phenomenon reflected by the picture is so widespread,especially in supercities.Thanks to the fast development of economy,we have a chance to experience the more richer life.As a result of that,the number of people who own cars is larger and larger.The once wide roads become narrow .In order to get to destinationon time,people have to set up earlier in case of being blocked.By the way ,discharging too much carbon-dioxide to the air would destroy the environment.Therefore,it is imperative for us to take measures to change the fact.The simplest method is to diminish the times of using private transportations.There is no doubt the world would change into a better place for us to live benefited from all the efforts we devote.

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