2024屆高考英語考前沖刺精品復(fù)習(xí)講義（北師大版）：寫作（二十九）
2024屆高考英語考前沖刺精品復(fù)習(xí)講義（北師大版）：寫作（二十九）閱讀下面兩則短訊，談?wù)勀銓W(wǎng)吧(Internet Bar)現(xiàn)象的看法。(不必把短訊譯成英文。)
北京市關(guān)閉了許多網(wǎng)吧，但仍有學(xué)生周末一早乘車去郊區(qū)上網(wǎng)。
遼寧省錦州市6 000余名學(xué)生舉行集體簽名儀式，保證遠(yuǎn)離網(wǎng)吧。
學(xué)生習(xí)作·外教批改
The news tells us improver1
that the increasing use of Internet Bars will obviously do harm to people，especially to the students who still don’t have strict self-discipline over themselves.2
Most students go to Internet Bars to play video games，which costs3 takes much of their precious time.Some students even stay in Internet Bars day and night，forgetting their academic study studies.No doubt these students will finally end up with their otherwise bright future destroyed.Furthermore，4 some students log in5 onto some pornographic websites accidentally，but6 and are eventually absorbed in the excitement of reading erotic stories or viewing dirty video clips.All these are harmful to the7 teenagers and if this is not curbed or the use of the Internet is not properly guided，8 some of them will commit crimes or to satisfy their curiosity.
In my opinion，9 students should use go to Internet Bars under the guidance of their parents and teachers.Only in this way can Internet Bars do students more good than harm.10 truly benefit students.
旁 批
1．沒有improver這個單詞。不清楚作者在這里想說什么。參見改寫后的句子。
2．沒有必要，因?yàn)閟elf-discipline意味著他們對自己的控制能力。
3．表示“花時間”用take time，而不是cost time。
4．這個連接詞用得好！
5．正確的用法是log onto而不是log in。
6．上下文不是轉(zhuǎn)折關(guān)系。
7．復(fù)數(shù)名詞表泛指時不加冠詞。
8．原文不合情理：對色情的沉迷怎么能加以引導(dǎo)呢？只能說對因特網(wǎng)的使用加以引導(dǎo)。
9．這個連接短語用得好！
10．在英語里很少見到這樣的表達(dá)。常用的表達(dá)方式是：more harm than good。最近，你校要求所有學(xué)生到校午休，同學(xué)們對此看法不一。請你根據(jù)下列要點(diǎn)寫一篇100詞左右的短文，客觀地反映同學(xué)們的觀點(diǎn)。
觀點(diǎn)一：同意(70%)
理由：在校時間更長，可以多做一些功課；便于統(tǒng)一管理學(xué)生到校的時間。
觀點(diǎn)二：反對(30%)
理由：在教室里休息對健康不利；不如在家安靜；身體得不到完全放松，休息不充分。
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【參考范文】
Recently，our school requires that every student should come to school for a nap after lunch.About seventy percent of the students are in favour of the idea，because they think that for one thing，the school can keep the students’ arrival at school under control，and as for students，they can stay at school a bit longer so that they have more time to do their lessons.However，the rest of the students disagree.In their opinion，having a nap at school does harm to their health and it is not as quiet as in their own bedrooms.What’s more，they can’t be so relaxed at their desks as to have a good rest.
2024屆高考英語考前沖刺精品復(fù)習(xí)講義（北師大版）：寫作（二十九）閱讀下面兩則短訊，談?wù)勀銓W(wǎng)吧(Internet Bar)現(xiàn)象的看法。(不必把短訊譯成英文。)
北京市關(guān)閉了許多網(wǎng)吧，但仍有學(xué)生周末一早乘車去郊區(qū)上網(wǎng)。
遼寧省錦州市6 000余名學(xué)生舉行集體簽名儀式，保證遠(yuǎn)離網(wǎng)吧。
學(xué)生習(xí)作·外教批改
The news tells us improver1
that the increasing use of Internet Bars will obviously do harm to people，especially to the students who still don’t have strict self-discipline over themselves.2
Most students go to Internet Bars to play video games，which costs3 takes much of their precious time.Some students even stay in Internet Bars day and night，forgetting their academic study studies.No doubt these students will finally end up with their otherwise bright future destroyed.Furthermore，4 some students log in5 onto some pornographic websites accidentally，but6 and are eventually absorbed in the excitement of reading erotic stories or viewing dirty video clips.All these are harmful to the7 teenagers and if this is not curbed or the use of the Internet is not properly guided，8 some of them will commit crimes or to satisfy their curiosity.
In my opinion，9 students should use go to Internet Bars under the guidance of their parents and teachers.Only in this way can Internet Bars do students more good than harm.10 truly benefit students.
旁 批
1．沒有improver這個單詞。不清楚作者在這里想說什么。參見改寫后的句子。
2．沒有必要，因?yàn)閟elf-discipline意味著他們對自己的控制能力。
3．表示“花時間”用take time，而不是cost time。
4．這個連接詞用得好！
5．正確的用法是log onto而不是log in。
6．上下文不是轉(zhuǎn)折關(guān)系。
7．復(fù)數(shù)名詞表泛指時不加冠詞。
8．原文不合情理：對色情的沉迷怎么能加以引導(dǎo)呢？只能說對因特網(wǎng)的使用加以引導(dǎo)。
9．這個連接短語用得好！
10．在英語里很少見到這樣的表達(dá)。常用的表達(dá)方式是：more harm than good。最近，你校要求所有學(xué)生到校午休，同學(xué)們對此看法不一。請你根據(jù)下列要點(diǎn)寫一篇100詞左右的短文，客觀地反映同學(xué)們的觀點(diǎn)。
觀點(diǎn)一：同意(70%)
理由：在校時間更長，可以多做一些功課；便于統(tǒng)一管理學(xué)生到校的時間。
觀點(diǎn)二：反對(30%)
理由：在教室里休息對健康不利；不如在家安靜；身體得不到完全放松，休息不充分。
________________________________________________________________________
________________________________________________________________________
【參考范文】
Recently，our school requires that every student should come to school for a nap after lunch.About seventy percent of the students are in favour of the idea，because they think that for one thing，the school can keep the students’ arrival at school under control，and as for students，they can stay at school a bit longer so that they have more time to do their lessons.However，the rest of the students disagree.In their opinion，having a nap at school does harm to their health and it is not as quiet as in their own bedrooms.What’s more，they can’t be so relaxed at their desks as to have a good rest.
