考研英語待批改作文：

　　0-4分

　　第五篇

　　Dear Sir or Madam,

　　I am the one who bought a mobile phone from your online store in July 1. I feel bad to trouble you but I am afraid that I have to make a complaint about the problems after using it for a short period of time.

　　The reason for my dissatisfaction is that the phone can not meet my requirements. In the first place, the battery needs recharging after 5 hours of use. In addition, the internal mernory is too small to store a song. Under these circumstances, I find it is regretful to bring the trouble which I can not accept it.

　　I appreciate it very much if you could change the mpbile phone for another model that works well, preferably return the full refund, and I would like to have this matter settled by 20 workdays.

　　Thank you for your consideration and I will be looking forward to your reply.

　　Yours sincerely,

　　Li Ming

　　考研英語作文批改點評如下：

　　Dear Sir or Madam,

　　I am the one who bought a mobile phone from your online store in July 1. I feel bad to trouble you but I am afraid that I have to make a complaint about the problems after using it for a short period of time.

　　The reason for my dissatisfaction is that the phone can not meet my requirements. In the first place, the battery needs recharging after 5 hours of use. In addition, the internal mernory(單詞拼寫錯誤,改為memory card) is too small to store a song. Under these circumstances, I find it is(刪除) regretful to bring the trouble which I can not accept it.(該句的意思是，由于上面提到的兩個問題，使我感覺)

　　I appreciate it very much if you could change the mpbile(單詞拼寫錯誤，改為mobile) phone for another model that works well, preferably return the full refund, and I would like to have this matter settled by 20 workdays.

　　Thank you for your consideration and I will be looking forward to your reply.

　　Yours sincerely,

　　Li Ming

　　3分

　　考研小作文的字數要求是100詞，不要超過太多，考試時間很緊張，把過多的時間用在寫小作文上是不合理的。一定要正確理解形式賓語。

　　小作文很重視作文的邏輯性，因此不要在邏輯方面出現大的問題，這篇作文中，由于你對形式賓語的理解偏差，導致這篇作文的邏輯出現問題，這會對分數產生很大影響。

　　考研英語待批改作文：

　　0-4分

　　第五篇

　　Dear Sir or Madam,

　　I am the one who bought a mobile phone from your online store in July 1. I feel bad to trouble you but I am afraid that I have to make a complaint about the problems after using it for a short period of time.

　　The reason for my dissatisfaction is that the phone can not meet my requirements. In the first place, the battery needs recharging after 5 hours of use. In addition, the internal mernory is too small to store a song. Under these circumstances, I find it is regretful to bring the trouble which I can not accept it.

　　I appreciate it very much if you could change the mpbile phone for another model that works well, preferably return the full refund, and I would like to have this matter settled by 20 workdays.

　　Thank you for your consideration and I will be looking forward to your reply.

　　Yours sincerely,

　　Li Ming

　　考研英語作文批改點評如下：

　　Dear Sir or Madam,

　　I am the one who bought a mobile phone from your online store in July 1. I feel bad to trouble you but I am afraid that I have to make a complaint about the problems after using it for a short period of time.

　　The reason for my dissatisfaction is that the phone can not meet my requirements. In the first place, the battery needs recharging after 5 hours of use. In addition, the internal mernory(單詞拼寫錯誤,改為memory card) is too small to store a song. Under these circumstances, I find it is(刪除) regretful to bring the trouble which I can not accept it.(該句的意思是，由于上面提到的兩個問題，使我感覺)

　　I appreciate it very much if you could change the mpbile(單詞拼寫錯誤，改為mobile) phone for another model that works well, preferably return the full refund, and I would like to have this matter settled by 20 workdays.

　　Thank you for your consideration and I will be looking forward to your reply.

　　Yours sincerely,

　　Li Ming

　　3分

　　考研小作文的字數要求是100詞，不要超過太多，考試時間很緊張，把過多的時間用在寫小作文上是不合理的。一定要正確理解形式賓語。

　　小作文很重視作文的邏輯性，因此不要在邏輯方面出現大的問題，這篇作文中，由于你對形式賓語的理解偏差，導致這篇作文的邏輯出現問題，這會對分數產生很大影響。